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Mar 2025
2h 8m

DZ-117: Tonal shifts

Chas Fisher and Stuart Willis
About this episode

How can we teach our audience new storytelling rules in the middle of our story?

Following on from our episodes on establishing tone through action lines and through character, this is what we have been building up to: how to pull off a tonal switch… that does not throw the audience out of the film. And, in particular, how to pull that off on the page when writers don’t have framing, lighting, music, editing, etc. at our disposal?

With that goal in mind, Mel and Chas dissect specific moments on the pages of SHAUN OF THE DEAD, SORRY TO BOTHER YOU and SWISS ARMY MAN. While there are definite craft tools identified - rhythm of action lines, varying use of unfilmmables and metaphors, establishing language patterns - the two big takeaways are: (1) pulling off a tonal shift takes a lot of setup; and (2) when the time comes, contrast on the page is key.

Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.

As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.

CHAPTERS

  • 00:00:00 – Cold Open
  • 00:00:25 - What do we mean by tonal shift?
  • 00:08:35 - Distinguishing between genre shift and tonal shift
  • 00:13:08 - Shaun of the Dead
  • 00:45:41 - Sorry to Bother You
  • 01:28:07 - Swiss Army Man
  • 02:02:10 – Key learnings and wrap up
  • 02:06:35 – Patreon thanks

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